Jackie

=__**Gender Essay:**__=

Second Draft:

My mom grew up with two younger brothers. My grandpa is very gender specific. His job was a printer, a job most men had. My grandma was a typical mom; she stayed at home and watched the children. My mom had many household chores, but more indoors than outdoors, “My job was to empty the dishwasher and help get ready for dinner with Grandma. My brothers helped Grandpa out with yard work and garbage”. My mom also had to babysit for her little brothers. With two sisters, I help out with all kinds of different things around my house and we share work evenly. I empty out the dishwasher and set the table, but sometimes I help bring garbage cans back in also. If I had a brother, I don’t think I would be doing the same things I do now. I would still do the same sports and activities, but household chores would be different. “Grandpa didn’t want me to go to college. He wanted me to get married out of high school and stay home like Grandma did.” My grandpa didn’t want my mom to go to college. “Well he must have given in, because he ended up paying for it.” My grandpa was very gender stereotypical, and wanted his kids to be like that. My parents let me and my sisters do whatever we want, regardless of being girls. We all help out around the house and do the same chores. You want for your kids what you had as a kid, and then change it to make it better. My parents allow us to do whatever we want to do and there is nothing we can’t do because of our gender.

**Comments - Second Draft:**
Try to add some things about your dad's side of the family and compare the two families. ~ Maddie D.

Lots to do here. All telling, NO anecdotes = dull account. Surely there is a story that captures workplace life as your mother/father saw it. Surely there is a second story that captures the change. Don't blame the interviewee here; clearly it's all on the interviewer. - MrC

This is practically the same thing everything says: that women had different things to do than boys in the past, and now both genders are more "free." How is it different in your case? - Brian

You need to narrow down a more specific topic and build on it. This is too generic by itself, but a modified version could be well used in the context of a certain aspect of gender stereotypes.-Matt Solnick

Explain more of how the way gender played a role in your parents' lives affect how gender plays a role in your life. - Jen

You should probably consider adding anecdotes from your mom and you dad saying what they thought of it. In addition try to say how gender roles are different in your life and how they affect you. - Maddie D.