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I think the biggest change in sports throughout my years in sports was something called title 9. Title 9 meant that if say, a school had a boys basketball team but not a girls basketball team; the school must have a girls team or no basketball team at all! A change in society affected by sports would be that if women could do something in sports like coach a men’s football team, then they could do more than that in any situation. I feel that if the school has both a men’s version and a girl’s version of the same sport then they should stay in their own sports. But, if the school has only one version of the sport then that’s okay to combine genders in sports. What about gender roles has changed off – court? Something like that would be that women used to not be allowed into the men’s locker room to interview the players after a game and they couldn’t get their information until the players were leaving the stadium or wherever they played at. Women’s sports are also different I than men’s. For example, in basketball, play over the rim and can’t jump as high to get a rebound or dunk, but men’s legs are powerful enough to do so. And the reason most people don’t like it is because they are not in the men’s pro basketball which everyone seems to think is the best type of basketball out there.

Look up Title IX -- in wikipedia perhaps -- and find out when it became law. Add an example from a college perhaps for clarity. MrC

Good reflection on the topic, but you should relate it to your interview. -Eleanor Sadik-Khan

You have good examples, but you should expand and give your opinion and possibly others on boys vs. girls sports. -Allison Dammann

Give examples of what you are talking about from your interview - TAS

Include anecdote, go into more detail about the title 9 thing, good idea and content, expand more, include anecdote- Conor Winston

You don't explain yoru topic. All you have is an anecdote. Expand.-Gwen


 * I can tell that you did some research on Title 9, but maybe try to give the opinion of the person you interviewed, rather than just your opinion, This would make your writing piece more deep and insightful. SiF **


 * Add more information from the interview, that supports what you're saying. Eleanor **


 * The topic is interesting, but I feel like you don't expand enough on gender roles on and off court. Maybe give more background on sports before and after Title 9, and your opinion. -Allison Dammann **