Bilal

Evil T.V. and Couch Combo
I am a coffee table I hate my life, my very existence. Everybody loves their beloved couch but what they don't know is: the couch is evil

Yeah I sit here all day Watching the couch swallow people in again and again Making them stay for hours on end With the help of the evil mind-numbing television!

All day I take people's loads, their burdens, and, their feet. And they say that I can be too cold for their precious feet, but they have no idea about what they're sitting on does to them.

Evil Coffee Table (Response)
I am the "evil, horrible," couch

But really, I am a vessel. A vessel of which the T.V. is the motor to take you to your favorite places in the midst of a bad day

That coffee table is trying to say that you're stupid dumb idiotic for liking us better than it

There is a reason that you all love me so that you find comfort in my embrace that every household has me

In reality it is the coffee table that is so so evil!

Trying to chill you with a single touch from toe to head Trying to limit you with the space that it has, and no more no less, but why not use the ground?

I say: that the coffee table is evil is horrible is a menace to society

To think, the coffee table had the wherewithal to say what it said to me! It doesn't know what it's gotten itself into!

Lauren -I love how you were very creative with the coffee table -I think you should change the title -I love the way you expressed the coffee table - I think you extended a little too much, cut some things

George - I really like the idea of the response - Maybe change the titles for more mystery - Change the last line - Nice descriptions

Laura -The metaphors you used really pulled the reader in. -The line breaks are in a good placement, without being too abrupt. - Maybe change the title- it's a little too literal. - Sometimes you use some repetition, so maybe you can cut some parts of the lines out.

Daniel -I liked the whole idea alot -Maybe change the titles to things not as literal -I liked how you personified furniture -I would add an evil laugh at the end of the response

Julia -very creative -great idea with the response -maybe you can think of a different title