Michael+A.

Michael Adler 4/5/11 English Section 2

Gender roles and stereotypes play a huge role in our society, but how big? We often think that families have a male working and supporting the family while the female stays home with the children. But what if the woman has a profession as well? How is the decision made who would stay home if the baby were born? Do stereotypes play such a huge role that they can alter ones life forever? Before my little sister was born, my house was comprised of my babysitter and I. Both of my parents worked out of the house and the only time I saw them was at night. Once my sister was born, the work that was to be done at the house greatly increased. That was when it was time to make the important decision of who would stay home with the kids. But as important as it might have seen, it was a simple decision nonetheless. But just how easily was this decision made? My mom decided to leave her job not because of money, but simply because she felt it was the right thing to do as a mother. My mother also believes that this decision may have slightly been based on stereotypical belief, and that mothers //should// be staying home. Here in Chappaqua, most of the mothers are stay at home mothers who tend to the family’s needs at home, though there are some mothers with professions. For my last question, I asked whether or not my mom was interested in maintaining her career. My mother said that she would be interested in starting a new career, and almost definitely part time because there is still the stereotypical mother that we see in many moms still in her. ___ Overall, i enjoyed how you showed that stereotypes do affect people. I liked how you used an example and had reasoning behind your essay.

I like how you gave a lot of descriptions, but you should put an anecdote to make the piece even better.
Good job I like how you ask the questions to get the reader thinking.

i enjoyed reading this essay, and liked the questions. i do think that you could add an anecdote

Very good, but maybe you could lengthen it and add your take on your mom's story

I liked how you used the story, but you should also add more facts about the story and lengthen the essay.

i think you could lengthen the essay to discuss more of how stereotypes affectes your mom after she left work, what other changes were made on top of this one

I think you should explain more about the parents/not the interview