Andrew

A NDREW--Still don't see the anecdote I mentioned below--some good editing, but (At least...) should be (at least...) and roll or role? Gender and Career choice

In American and world history gender there was a large barrier placed between men and women. Gender decided your schooling, life, choice in career your roll in the world, and a lot about you. It wasn’t until (At least in our culture) After WW1 that woman started to get jobs in America and play a different roll. I choose to interview my dad, Robert De Marchis and my mom, Suzanne De Marchis. I asked them the same questions but got different results. Firstly my dad Robert De Marchis grew up in the 1970’s with an older sister and a younger brother. I asked my dad “Do you think that your gender affected your career choice?” He said that gender no that he felt open to all Careers and the reason he chose to become a CPA is because he was good at it. I asked, “Did your Children affect your career?” he said that his children changed his career habits and sped up his move out of the city. My dad worked in the city for a while an knew that he didn’t want to work in the city forever so having children just sped up his move out of the city. He also noticed no split in school classes he thought that through high school and collage he saw men and women in all of his classes. He also said that growing up he always wanted kids and a family. I interviewed my mom Suzanne De Marchis who also grew up in the 1970’s but with a younger brother. She said that in choosing her career she wanted one that would allow her to stay home sometimes and take care of a family. She also said that children affected her career because she opted to take a part tome job to take care of her children. I asked her if she felt that she worked mostly with men or woman and she said that she works with women only in her school. She agreed with my dad saying that they both knew they wanted children growing up. This made me think about how much gender has change in American and world history but also how much further we could go. i think that there will always be "Boy jobs" and "Girl jobs" but i think that we can still make the difference less drastic.

All telling, NO anecdotes makes it duller than it should be. Surely there is a story that captures workplace life as your father saw it. Surely there is a second story that captures the change. Don't blame the interviewee here; go back and ask them to tell a story --MrC

Dont say i interviewed... then tell what they said, instead use what they said to help you prove a point about gender

i think you are off to a start but it needs stories and personal beliefs and opinions
This is all facts, make it more of a story and add your opinion.

It sounds like we are listening to the interview, instead use the interview dont tell it.

adding specific stories or using the answers to these questions could lead you to a great place, although you arent quite there yet

I THINK YOU SHOULD  try to put some more opinion into it.