Jacob+L.

Michael Levine grew up in Manhattan with one brother, a mother, and a father. His father worked as a lawyer and his mother was a housewife, so his family was very conventional. His brother is now a Graduate Student for Environmental Science. While his mother took care of the house and raised the kids, Michael did chores as well, like cleaning his room, doing the dishes, and walking the dog. Michael grew up to go to Swarthmore College and get a job as a bond trader. He was hired out of college into an analyst group for a trading company and made his way into trading. He says that the job has its ups and downs, but he likes it in the run. Most of his friends became lawyers (mostly men), teachers, and in entertainment. He wanted the job he got because he wanted a good amount of money and was better with numbers. He says that men were dominant in his workplace, and the office was like a locker-room atmosphere. The CEO’s were men, but the women were treated as equals when there was one, even though they were the minority. He normally acted very differently around women, but in the workplace, it was about competition to do the best. He says that the women weren’t into the type of job he had because they weren’t as good with numbers, and the ones that did have the job got either lucky or were extremely smart. What he said was very stereotypical. He had seen 3 women in 3 different companies working in the same area that he had. Even though that could be seen as an experiment for his stereotypical hypothesis, it doesn’t necessarily mean that women are bad at math; they might just prefer a different profession that is more intriguing to them. But, Michael has seen a change in gender roles over the years. He has realize that just as many women have jobs as men, are treated with respect, and are treated as equals. People care less when they see a women working, even when they are working in a difficult job like Michael was.

All telling, NO anecdotes = dull account. Surely there is a story that captures workplace life as your father saw it. Surely there is a second story that captures the change. Don't blame the interviewee here; clearly it's all on the interviewer. --MrC __Laura__ -When you talk about the women being a minority in the workplace, use a story from Michael as an example to show when the women were less common in the workplace. -When you talk about how Michael has seen gender changes with jobs, instead of just telling the reader what he thinks, talk about interesting examples of what your father saw.

Bilal -Try using an anecdote or two -Try making it longer

__George__ more of a plot less boring anecdotes

Julia: maybe you can make this more into a story to incorporate the meaning in a way that interests the readers more

Daniel I would add an anecdote to make the reader more involved